Brand Spankin New Rockwell - Time to Ride

J.Carnage & I collaborated on the 'His Royal Flyness' beat from DJ Revolution's recent instrumental release Steel Wheel. This is the result. What y'all think?

MY LYRICS:

You lame as fuck like a lame duck president
when the senate is, on my side
the entire internet is down to ride,
for the M-I-C because I preside,
over the H-I-P hop nerdom
and i herd them, where i want them to go
because my school is old,
like a Werther's Original
I am seminal, like 36 Chambers is
and this 16s dangerous
the CDC can't contain this strain
and the strangest thing is
that the brainless will play this in their playlist
not realizing that I'm plagued with anguish
or the strength it takes just, for me to say this
I need a lady to save me from this
and the crazy thing is, the latest, I laid with is one
I impregnated, but she's insane and its just my luck
I really shouldn't just give a fuck
and be the Shadiest protege of the greatest
and its controversial for me to say this
because he's Caucasian and I am too
so what? that makes, me a racist?
but I'm just on this beat because I love hip-hop,
and I know you do too
I'm trying to lay it out in a way that you can understand
but you do you
maybe I'll never make it, but then again some days, dreams come true
maybe I just need some inspiration like my boy J has Jude
and maybe its rude
for me to mention your son's name
but seriously, when your son came
it was like literally the Sun came
and reignited the light in your life
and I liked to see that happen to you
but I'd like to see it happen to me too
and maybe rappin' can do it
but if not, DJ Screw it...

I'd write out J's but I'm lazy...

This is ill. No chorus, just dope verses over good beat. I can't wait to hear what u will do with my beat. Did u download it already?

That's quite good. Beat is pretty groovy and the 2 verses were on point. I'm impressed.

PKT wrote:

This is ill. No chorus, just dope verses over good beat. I can't wait to hear what u will do with my beat. Did u download it already?

Thanks PKT, I really appreciate it. Yeah I got it (thanks btw), I'm working on it now. I'll try to have it up in a few days.

Solar Deity wrote:

That's quite good. Beat is pretty groovy and the 2 verses were on point. I'm impressed.

Thanks for listening, man. I'm glad you were feeling it. I have other tracks on here if you ever want to check them out.

Hey that dude JCarnage is white? The one saying n-i-g-g-a?

Nice verse man, you got some writing skills no doubt. Just work on your delivery. Are you reading off paper?

TicNitty706 wrote:

Hey that dude JCarnage is white? The one saying n-i-g-g-a?

Nice verse man, you got some writing skills no doubt. Just work on your delivery. Are you reading off paper?

Nah, he's Mexican (idk if that makes it better, but every non-white guy down here says it). Thanks, man, I know I have more work to do. On this one I was just recording piece by piece as i thought of it. I was just too lazy to go back and re-record once the whole verse came to fruition.

thelundquist wrote:

TicNitty706 wrote:

Hey that dude JCarnage is white? The one saying n-i-g-g-a?

Nice verse man, you got some writing skills no doubt. Just work on your delivery. Are you reading off paper?

Nah, he's Mexican (idk if that makes it better, but every non-white guy down here says it). Thanks, man, I know I have more work to do. On this one I was just recording piece by piece as i thought of it. I was just too lazy to go back and re-record once the whole verse came to fruition.

Oh okay. The reason I made that assumption is because when I read your verse you said he's white and so am I. But I just thought about it you were talking about Eminem. Right?

yeah I was talking about Em.